喜菡文學網

Oh! My!
Hold me against your heart
Cause loneliness never die.
See the deep inside
In your mind’s eye.
Feelings can’t even lie.
To you,
Ever feel the same as I.
But who am I?
A butterfly
Stay for a short while.
To change my life
Need an amazing fly.
Though I may cry
At darkest night.
Be patient to wait tissues dry.
Again will I try
To lead a meaningful life.
As one brave knight
Saves his wife
From the bad guy.
Determined no fears
Change my mind.
Truely believe victory
Eventually on my side.
Such a highlight
When stars shining in the sky.
Good luck,my friend.
it＇s time
to say double bye.

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Koala.Y謹上:)

As the boardmaster suggested, we do have a section for foreign language writers. Reading you poem, I have spotted a few rough spots, grammatical errors and lines out of rhyme. There is even one misspelled word. (Truely-->Truly)
Since this is the Chinese language section, I will hold off further comments.


Welcome aboard!